dusk in their eyes
suddenly finds reprieve
when an owl
disturbs branches
and the moon startles them with light
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Tiring the heart--
mountains and ocean
too much beauty
---Santōka
mountains and ocean
too much beauty
---Santōka
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7 comments:
Yes!...
set the captives free...
I really liked some of the lines.
Also, what kind of owl was it?
I really liked aspects of:
when an owl
disturbs branches
and the moon startles them with light
Except for the fact I didn't know who "their eyes" and "startles them" related to.
all my best,
Alan
Alan’s Area 17 blog
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I particularly like the last line of the tanka.
R K
I agree, I really like that last line!
Alan
Alan’s Area 17 blog
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..thanks all--casa da poesia\alan\
and R.K.--much appreciate
your taking the time to comment..
..Alan..i think this one of the
poems which spirit Harmony flew
through me and i liked it immediately on first read..so, it didn't ask for any sort of revision
which i sometimes do..i guess i could have asked, 'which sort of owl' but the harmony was there already and i didn't want to mess with it..the poem is pretty simple
(at least, i hope it is)..the people of start of poem are the same as they of the end of poem..i thank for raising these concerns
and wonder if some other readers find the poem as somewhat confusing
as you do..much appreciation..
..spiros
It serves no purpose to read, academically speaking, to confuse! Here almost all of us read to enjoy!!
R K
Crystal clear :)
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