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Tiring the heart--
mountains and ocean
too much beauty

---Santōka
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starlight and memory
the wink of a one-eyed dog
as it sneezes
.

5 comments:

Vida said...

I love this!

Area 17 said...

Thanks Vida, and well done on your Mainichi credit! ;-)

Alan

Vida said...

Thank you, Alan! I have good teachers :)You and everybody else on this blog have been so kind and supportive ever since my very first poetry attempts!

Spiros Zafiris said...

..that's really great, Alan..i'm
also in another group whose moderators wouldn't dream of using
a full seventeen syllables--but i
say, what matters is the complete
poem (the haiku/senryu)..and sometimes the short offerings of they who are so bent, could well be
improved by more..>>spiros

Area 17 said...

Gosh it does look like it's almost seventeen syllables. ;-)

I think it's 5/7/4 but depends on how a person's accent works I guess. ;-)

It's an old version now, this is the current one:

starlight and memory
the sneeze
of a one-eyed dog


What forum is it?

Alan