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Tiring the heart--
mountains and ocean
too much beauty

---Santōka
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escaped sunlight
on the woodland paths
primrose and anemone

2 comments:

diana l. said...

I like this, but for the word "escaped" (something about the awkwardness of the rhythm...)

What would you think about "fugitive sunlight" instead, perhaps?

David said...

Now fugitive is a fantastic word diana.

fugitive sunlight
on the woodland paths
primrose and anemone

i'll think about it a while

Thanks

David