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Tiring the heart--
mountains and ocean
too much beauty

---Santōka
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first warm day
sleet on the skylight
spring thaw
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1 comment:

Pan Haiku Review said...

I do like this, but maybe too much going on?

Terrific second line! ;-)

first warm day
sleet on the skylight
spring thaw

First warm day is a season phrase for Spring.

first warm day
sleet on the skylight
NEW LINE

maybe?
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May 10, 2010

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