i love this poem.i wonder do you meanin betweenmy nightmare and the rainan open door in betweenmy nightmare and the rain -a door opensin betweenmy nightmare and the rainan door opengreat haiku hereDavid
The first one, David. Still i'm in doubt about grammatical correctness in my haiku. I meant "open" as an adjective, instead of a verb. Should i put the third line as it is ( a door open) or "an open door"?Any suggestion?
I like this a lot. Pre-modifying the noun makes the haiku flow. If you were to post-modify 'door' i think you would add an unnecessary complexity to the haiku.just a thought!!in betweenmy nightmare and the rainan open doorreally good one.David
I see. Thx so much Dave. May I just take your version to replace the original version and give you a credit?
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