I love your last two lines!
Thanks Diana - I think this was of those which came out to quickly, maybe this is in someway better:The visual evidencethis early morning sunI believe in spring
Yes, Ashi, this is an improvement. In your new draft you bring together the factual observation of spring and the feeling in your heart.
Thanks Dennis :)
I like it better, too.
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I love your last two lines!
Thanks Diana - I think this was of those which came out to quickly, maybe this is in someway better:
The visual evidence
this early morning sun
I believe in spring
Yes, Ashi, this is an improvement. In your new draft you bring together the factual observation of spring and the feeling in your heart.
Thanks Dennis :)
I like it better, too.
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