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Tiring the heart--
mountains and ocean
too much beauty

---Santōka
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The visual evidence
decreasing snow
I believe

Blinded and hypnotized
this early morning sun
I believe in spring

5 comments:

diana l. said...

I love your last two lines!

Ashi said...

Thanks Diana - I think this was of those which came out to quickly, maybe this is in someway better:

The visual evidence
this early morning sun
I believe in spring

Dennis Tomlinson said...

Yes, Ashi, this is an improvement. In your new draft you bring together the factual observation of spring and the feeling in your heart.

Ashi said...

Thanks Dennis :)

diana l. said...

I like it better, too.